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The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the highest
countries
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 in
rice
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producing
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 in 2020.
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,
China
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 was by far higher than the other recorded
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, and its
rice
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production
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 was almost equal to the sum of
mentioned
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countries
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 except India. Japan and Brazil came at the bottom in
rice
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production
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 among the 10
countries
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.
China
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's
rice
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production
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 was on the top in 2020 with just over 140,000
thousand
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tons
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. India came right after
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 with almost a quarter less than
China
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's annual produced rise.
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 Indonesia was in
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third place, its yearly
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 was only one-third of what was India producing. Bangladesh's
rice
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production
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 was nearly
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 the same level
with
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 Indonesia with an annual
production
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 of just below 40,000
thousand
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tons
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. Vietnam produced nearly 25,000
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tons
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, which was almost double the annual
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 of Japan and Brazil. Buma and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 produce significant quantities of
rice
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, and they came in the 7th and 8th places,respectively, with nearly 20,000
thousand
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tons
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 of
rice
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 produced in sum in these two
countries
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 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, rice, china, production, thousand, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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