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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart shows the
spendings
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spending
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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 and
France
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 on several
good
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goods
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 in 2010 in pound sterlings.
Overall
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, the highly demanded products for both countries were cars, computers, and books,
while
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perfume
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the perfume
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 and camera industries
demostrated
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demonstrated
 the smallest results.
Firstly
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, expenditure on cars reached more than
a
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apply
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400.000
pound
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pounds
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sterlings
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sterling
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 in both states, making them the most valuable product among others.
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computers showed relatively similar data in both countries, about 360.000 pounds.
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UK
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The UK
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 was
dominant
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a dominant
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 buyer of books in comparison with
France
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, spending on books 100.000 pounds more than
France
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. Expediture
on
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of
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camaras
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cameras
 in
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UK
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the UK
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 prevailed twice of amount
spended
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spent
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 in
France
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 spent 350000 on cameras,
whereas
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France
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 spent only 150000. 200000 and 150000 pounds were spent on toilet water by
France
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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 respectively;
however
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, perfume is the least popular product in the chart
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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