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Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter • say how long you now want to rent the apartment for • explain why your plans have changed • tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my desire to stay in the
apartment
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 for longer than six months. I would like to rent your
apartment
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 for 2 years if possible. My plans have changed because I signed a contract
for
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to
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 work for 2 years and
therefore
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 I need to rent an
apartment
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 for
this
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 period. Your
apartment
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 is in a convenient location. There is a good transport interchange, there are many shops nearby.
Also
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, my new job is 10 minutes away by metro.There is a park nearby where you can take an evening walk before going to bed.
However
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, I would like to inform you in advance that your
apartment
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 has a few problems. The door does not lock and the kitchen hood does not work. If you could fix these few problems,
then
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 we can sign a contract with you for 2 years. I hope for your understanding. I apologize for the inconvenience and for taking up your time. Please reply as soon as possible so that the contract can be signed. Yours faithfully, Artem Gendlin

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coherence cohesion
While the letter is well-structured, consider breaking down the problem description into shorter sentences for clearer readability.
task achievement
Make sure all punctuation marks are properly in place, like commas after introductory phrases.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the request and provides a logical explanation for the change in rental duration.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is polite, formal, and appropriate for addressing a landlord.
logical structure
The points about the apartment's issues are concisely presented, allowing the landlord to understand the tenant's needs better.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease extension
  • rent renewal
  • tenancy agreement
  • extend contract
  • residential term
  • currently residing
  • plan adjustment
  • maintenance issue
  • residential upkeep
  • repair request
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