The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
trips
made by the young population -aged from 5- 12 years- in one country in 1990 and 2010 to go to and from school using various methods
of transportation. the total number of trips
was measured in millions.
overall
, with the exception of car use, all other methods
were more widely used back in 1990 than in 2010. while
the car was the most utilized method in 2010, it was the least accepted one in 1990.
regarding the methods
depend on physical activity namely: walking, cycling and walking and
Correct word choice
apply
bus
, Correct article usage
the bus
while
walking was the most used methods
in 1990 Fix the agreement mistake
method
by
almost 12 million Change preposition
with
trips
, it was cut off to nearly half in 2010 with almost 6 million trips
. additionally
cycling and walking and bus in 1990 wree
higher than in 2010 by almost 4 and 3 million Correct your spelling
were
trips
respectively.
on the other hand
, vehicle
as Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles such
car
and Fix the agreement mistake
cars
bus
were Fix the agreement mistake
buses
commomly
used in 2010Correct your spelling
commonly
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