The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003.

The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003.
The supplied table compares the annual age when representatives of both genders retire in six different countries, namely Australia, the UK, Japan, Italy, France and Korea in 2003.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that there is little difference in the retirement threshold between males and females. It is obvious that
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the eligibility age for males is noticeably higher in comparison with women. With regards to Australia and the USA, Australian and American male citizens retired approximately at the same age with one and a half difference in ages.
Moreover
, in Japan, the male average retirement year comprised 67,4 years,
while
for females it was 66,9.
Besides
, males and females in France retired in 57,4 and 56,9 respectively. Looking at the table in more detail, the average retirement of Italian men was 58,2,
while
this
statistic was less by 9 months for women. In the Asian country, namely Korea pensionable ages for both genders comprised 68,8 and 67,2 respectively.
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