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You have recently seen an advertisement in a newspaper for a job that you are interested in. Write a letter to the employer. In your letter: Introduce yourself and explain why you are writing. Describe your qualifications and experience that make you suitable for the job. Ask for more information about the job and the application process.

Dear Madam or Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well . My name is Pouria Sharifzad and I have decided to write you
this
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 letter to express my interest in
you
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your
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 job opportunity
of
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for
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programmer
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a programmer
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 . I
have seen
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saw
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 your advertisement in
Times
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the Times
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 newspaper yesterday and I wanted to apply for the position . I have 4 years of experience as
junior
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a junior
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 software programmer at
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a facebook
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facebook
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 company and developed many applications for them .
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, I have found myself suitable for the job as I am a fast learner,
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also
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and also
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creative
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a creative
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 person.
In addition
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, I am very passionate about computers and technologies and familiar with programming
softwares
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software
. At
last
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, I will be glad if you respond to
this
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 letter with more information
such
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 as working hours , location and salary of the role .
Besides
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 that , Can you please tell me about the documents you need and
application
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the application
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 process
.
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 Yours sincerely, Pouria Sharifzad

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task achievement
The letter meets the primary requirements of the task. It introduces the writer, describes qualifications, and requests more information. However, some sentences could be more polished to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas: an introduction, a section on qualifications, and a section with questions about the job.
coherence cohesion
Review grammar, especially articles (e.g., 'a job opportunity,' 'the Times newspaper') and punctuation (e.g., adding commas where necessary).
suitable writing tone
The letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for a job application.
task achievement
You efficiently covered your qualifications and experience, making your suitability for the role clear.
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