The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts below
illustrates
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the percentage of 4 kinds of
cars
in British in the years of 1965, 1985 and 2005. It's obvious that most citizens in
UK
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the UK
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liked private
cars
,
whereas
the proportion of recreational
vehicles
was the lowest.
Except
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personal
cars
, other
cars
all showed a decreasing trend during those years. In 1965, British people who used their own
cars
occupied the largest ratio, with
the
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percentage of 40%, which was evidently higher than that of public
vehicles
(25%). Meanwhile, lorries and other
commercical
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commercial
vehicles
took up 20% of the quantity, compared with 15% for recreational
cars
, which was the lowest. When it comes to 1985, the proportion of personal
vehicles
saw
an
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significant upward and reached
at
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55%, which was more than two times
of
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that of public transport and
commercical
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commercial
cars
(both 20%).
In addition
, the percentage of
cars
for entertainment decreased quickly and fell to only 5%. When
time
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comes
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to 2005,
vehicles
for personal
uses
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continued to
went
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up and
finally
reached 60%, which was the highest, which was almost 3 times of public transport(22%).
On the other hand
, the proportion of lorries and other
commercical
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commercial
cars
dropped to 10%, which was merely half of that in 1985,
while
entertainment
vehicles
grew up to 8%, which was still the lowest one.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, vehicles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Dominant
  • Fluctuations
  • Noticeable increase
  • Significantly decreased
  • Consistent rise
  • Continuous decline
  • Varied trends
  • Data illustrates
  • Common vehicle type
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