You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance. ▪️Introduce yourself ▪️Describe the training course and how it would benefit your work ▪️Explain why you need financial assist ance.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding
a
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financial help for a
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training
course
which would help me in my future career. My name is Rajdeep Kaur and I have recently completed my
bechelors
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bachelors
bachelor's
in Pharmaceutical science. I am a hardworking and dedicated student who
want
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to pursue
the
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higher studies in the
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renowned
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of London. As I mentioned, I am a pharmacy
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, I want to join the post-graduate
course
known as DPharma at London University. The ambition for
this
course
is to gain more useful knowledge about my field of study and get a desired job in future.
This
course
contains several aspects that would assist me in my upcoming career which involves professional hands-on training and a number of interpersonal skills.
Healthcare
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industry always seeking
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great
customers
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skills
along with
accurate knowledge which I believe
this
course
offers me.
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, I need
this
financial help because I am
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as a part-time assistant
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savings are not enough
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abroad. My parents can help me partially but I
also
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require
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for my accommodation and miscellaneous expenses. I would really appreciate I could get some
assitance
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assistance
on
this
matter and thank you for giving me
this
oppertunity
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opportunity
to apply for
this
help. yours faithfully, Rajdeep Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you use paragraphs to break up different sections of your content, making it easier to follow.
task achievement
Although you have responded to the task, providing more specific details about the course content and how it directly relates to your career could enhance your response.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors to improve clarity. For example, 'oppertunity' should be 'opportunity', and 'assitance' should be 'assistance'.
task achievement
You have maintained a suitable writing tone throughout the letter, which makes your request sound genuine and professional.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, adding to the professionalism of your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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