You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates data regarding the comparison of weekly revenue expenditure on eight categories by families in a nation over half a century, in two distinct years, 1968 and 2018. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it can be seen that food accounted for the highest proportion of weekly spending in 1968
while
fuel and power were the lowest.
Furthermore
, the money spent per week on leisure ranked first
while
personal goods
and
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fuel and power ranked
last
in 2018.
Firstly
, in 1968 food items comprised the major weekly cost of a family with 35% of the total. Meanwhile, all other spending categories registered 10% (Housing) or less of the expenditure.
Moreover
, not even one single segment recorded less than 5% of the cost half a century ago.
Secondly
, in 2018 the majority of finances were dedicated to leisure, housing, food and transport from the highest proportion downward registering about 22%, 19% , 17% and 14% respectively.
Furthermore
, household goods (8%), clothing and footwear (5%), fuel and power and personal goods (both 4%) recorded the lowest percentages of weekly spending in a downward sequence again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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