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The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the
number
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 of
visits
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 made by
people
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 across six
age
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 groups to hospital
emergency
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care
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 departments in Northern Ireland in
December
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 2016 and 2017. It is evident that there was a slight increase in the rate of hospital
emergency
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care
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visits
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 across all six
age
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 categories from
December
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 2016 to
December
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 2017. In both months, elderly
people
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 and young children accounted for the highest
number
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 of
visits
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 to hospital
emergency
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care
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 departments. In
December
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 2016 and 2017, adults over 75 years old had the highest
number
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 of hospital
emergency
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visits
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, with roughly 65
attendances
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 per 1,000
people
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 in 2016 and 70
attendances
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 per 1,000 in 2017.
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 group were children under 5 years of
age
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, with approximately 52
attendances
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 per 1,000 in
December
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 2016 and 54
attendances
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 per 1,000 in 2017. The remaining
age
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 groups—5 to 15, 16 to 44, 45 to 64, and 65 to 74—made fewer trips to hospital
emergency
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care
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 departments, with
attendances
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 all under 40 per 1,000
people
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 in both
December
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 2016 and 2017. Among these, individuals aged 5 to 15 years old had the lowest
number
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 of
visits
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, with just over 20 per 1,000 in both months.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visits, people, age, emergency, care, december, attendances with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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