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You are interested in attending a training course abroad but require financial support to do so. Write a letter to the education department requesting financial assistance. ▪️Introduce yourself ▪️Describe the training course and how it would benefit your work ▪️Explain why you need financial assist ance.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to express my
sencere
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sincere
intrest
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interest
 for attending
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training
course
 in
germany
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Germany
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.My name is Amarpreet
singh
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. I have been Enroll
Supply
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the Supply
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 chain
managemnet
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management
 at the University of
toronto
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Toronto
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 which will be completed
on
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 the end of next month.
This
course
 which
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 am planning to do is logistics from
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the Universty
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Universty
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University
 of Berlin , which is
sechduled
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scheduled
31
september
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September
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lasts
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and lasts
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 for one month. I found that
this
course
 significantly contributes to my personal and professional development, which would help
to get
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success
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in my career. Privously, I had sufficient funds which
i
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 saved
while
 doing
part time
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a part-time
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 job but
last
 month my sister had a serious accident so my whole
saving
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savings
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 spent on her medical expenses.
Although
i
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 paid my
course
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i
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 still need help with
accomodation
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accommodation
and travel expenses.
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Thank
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Than
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 you in advance for your consideration
Your
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 faithfully AMARPREET SINGH
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coherence cohesion
Consider improving sentence structure and grammar for a smoother reading experience, e.g., 'I have enrolled in Supply Chain Management at the University of Toronto, which I will complete at the end of next month.'
task achievement
Provide more specific details on how the logistics course will benefit your work in Supply Chain Management.
coherence cohesion
Ensure correct spellings and punctuation, for example: 'University of Berlin,' 'Thank you in advance for your consideration,' and 'Yours faithfully.'
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which suits the formal request for financial assistance.
coherence cohesion
The paragraph structure is generally clear, and each paragraph addresses a specific component of the task.
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