The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line chart compares and contrasts the people number taking part in a variety of activities held at a community centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period of 20 years from 2000 to 2020.

Overall

, it is evident that the film club is the most favourable and most activities saw an upward trend

while

the dramatics group witnessed the opposite. Looking at the provided chart for more details, it is apparent that over the first 5-year period, both film club and martial arts experienced a slight decrease in members

while

amateur dramatic art and table tennis saw a moderate rise.

In addition

, no one was interested in musical performances before 2005. In the next 5 years, amateur dramatics lost their attraction so its member numbers dropped significantly and reached the same number for table tennis in 2010.

Moreover

, from 2010 to 2020, the figure for table tennis rocketed and peaked at over 52 in 2020.

In contrast

, the number of people who were into amateur dramatics sank from 20 to 5 units.

Last

but not least, film club and musical performances saw the same increasing pattern over the period.

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