The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.
The given two graphs illustrate information about the average working
hours
for eight particular occupations, and the percentage of each job that has illness related to pressure.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that
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there seems to be no correlation between the number of working
hours
and the amount of pressure. For the first graph, we can find that there is
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biggest gap between businessmen and lecturers, businessmen have the longest average working
hours
of 70
hours
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and is almost three times greater than that of the lecturers, which is the lowest (25
hours
only).
Moreover
, writers, doctors and movie producers’ figures are relatively higher, with around 50
hours
.
However
, the rest of the occupations’ figures are lower, around 40
hours
only. When it comes to the second chart, The biggest one is found in lecturers, with 25%, revealing that
this
profession has the largest level of stress,
while
the close following can be found in movie producers and doctors, with around 20%.
However
, the rest of the jobs only have figures around 10%.
Besides
that, an abnormal phenomenon is that,
although
the programmers seem to have to deal with a lot of problems and work for 40
hours
per week, they have less pressure.
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