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You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words. The percentage of household energy use in Australia:

You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words. The percentage of household energy use in Australia:
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electric
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electrical
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things
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which are
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that
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 need different
energy
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 and produce different
amount
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gas
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. Heating and cooling are not
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 that need the biggest
energy
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,
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 but produce the most
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. Water heating is a thing that
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 the
biggest
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most
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energy
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 but does not produce as much
gas
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 as heating and cooling. The thing that
produce
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 the least
gas
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 is
stand by
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 and
also
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 only
need
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least
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energy
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. There are
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things
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 that produce
same
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 amount
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gas
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of gas
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 but different
energy
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which
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is used
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 as lighting and refrigeration.
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 and cooking
are
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also
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 need
same
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the same
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 amount
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energy
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 but different
gas
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that is
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 produced by them. So the
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 produced does not depend on how much
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used
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. We
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 can see that heating and cooling
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are
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 the main
things
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 that
caused
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 greenhouse because of the
gas
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 produced and it
become
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more
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worse because of the other
things
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 that can produce
gas
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words things, energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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