The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
The present line graph shows how the data of surveys gathered from
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the visitors
visitors
information Change noun form
visitors'
visitor's
office
in a region categorized by each person, Fix the agreement mistake
offices
electronic-mail
, and telephone in the first semester of 2011. From an Correct your spelling
electronic mail
overall
perspective, it can be seen that Linking Words
in person
and by telephone have Add a hyphen
in-person
a
similar upward Correct article usage
apply
trends
, Correct the article-noun agreement
trend
while
the letter/email approach experienced a reversed manner over the period shown.
Examining the details, in the first Linking Words
month
of 2011, Use synonyms
face-to-face
method started as the lowest number at below 500, and in the next two Add an article
the face-to-face
months
it Add a comma
months,
has
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apply
a
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apply
gradual increase
to exactly 800. For the next quartal, the data climbed significantly to almost 1900 in the Replace the word
gradually increased
last
of June, making it Linking Words
as
the highest number of questionnaires Change preposition
apply
within
the others. Change preposition
among
Additionally
, in January, by call Linking Words
placed
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was placed
as
the most preferable Correct your spelling
was
tools
, being more than 800 data. Fix the agreement mistake
tool
However
, in the next Linking Words
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month
there was a noticeable decline to exactly 800. There was Add a comma
month,
a
growth to 1000 in March and AprilRemove the article
apply
,
and rose to 1600 in the Remove the comma
apply
last
Linking Words
month
listed on the graph. Use synonyms
In contrast
, the most interesting point was for the letter/email. Linking Words
Although
there were almost 800 favour writing types in the earlier, the trend witnessed a gradual decline to nearly 700 both in February and MarchLinking Words
,
and Remove the comma
apply
continue
dropping slightly to less than 400 in the Wrong verb form
continued
last
two Linking Words
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month
. The total number made it Fix the agreement mistake
months
as
the least Correct word choice
apply
chose
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chosen
methods
by people among others.Fix the agreement mistake
method
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