The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the stages of removing salt from
seawaterwater
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seawater water
to make sweet
water
.
Overall
,
this
process has four main phases.
First,
salty
water
is exrationed from the sea to the first
stage
where
water
is faced with a pre-treatment filter.
Then
this
vital liquid goes with high speed to the second step and is forced through a membrane which has a construction to
separates
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separate
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water
molecules from salt and impurities which come with
seawaterwater
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seawater water
.
This
membrane consists of many small holes which just allow
water
molecules of the same size as the holes can pass through
this
to the next
stage
. In the first two stages some
water
which is not filtered gets back into the sea again which is called Filter backwash and Sea
water
concentrates in order. Later, the third
stage
is Post-treatment. It means
water
cleaned with some chemicals
such
as lime, chlorine and fluoride. After the
last
three phases, the
last
stage
is a place for storage of the
water
then
this
crucial drink which we call sweet
water
and we can drink it through pipes to
integrated
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an integrated
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water
supply system.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desalination
  • intake
  • pre-treatment
  • filtering system
  • reverse osmosis
  • semi-permeable membrane
  • dissolved salts
  • impurities
  • post-treatment
  • minerals
  • palatable
  • distribution
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