The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the stages of removing salt from
seawaterwater
to make sweet Correct your spelling
seawater water
water
.
Overall
, this
process has four main phases.
First,
salty water
is exrationed from the sea to the first stage
where water
is faced with a pre-treatment filter. Then
this
vital liquid goes with high speed to the second step and is forced through a membrane which has a construction to separates
Wrong verb form
separate
water
molecules from salt and impurities which come with seawaterwater
.
Correct your spelling
seawater water
This
membrane consists of many small holes which just allow water
molecules of the same size as the holes can pass through this
to the next stage
. In the first two stages some water
which is not filtered gets back into the sea again which is called Filter backwash and Sea water
concentrates in order.
Later, the third stage
is Post-treatment. It means water
cleaned with some chemicals such
as lime, chlorine and fluoride. After the last
three phases, the last
stage
is a place for storage of the water
then
this
crucial drink which we call sweet water
and we can drink it through pipes to integrated
Correct article usage
an integrated
water
supply system.Submitted by sarvin.rahimi9898 on
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