, The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

, The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The pie charts illustrate the amount of people's money that they spent on various commodities and services in a European country in 1958 and
in
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2008
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, in 1958 humans preferred to spend their budget mostly
to
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meal
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, housing and clothing.
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, in 2008 adults
payed
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their
bill
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bills
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for housing,
then
for
traveling
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and for different luxury goods (both 17%). The most noticeable thing in
first
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chart is that many adults used 72% of the whole budget
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necessary staff
such
as food,
houses
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and clothes.
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of
bill
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, nearly
third
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a third
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% of
money
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they
splended
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spend
to
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entertainment, some luxury things and
traveling
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. Regarding
to
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sales in 2008, the biggest percentage of
pie
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went to housing, 32% respectively.
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the second place,
traveling
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and luxuries were very popular for humans,
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a totally
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totally
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34
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of 34
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percentages
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. To compare products in luxury categories,
itwas
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it was
most unpopular for humans in 1958.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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