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The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show some data about
world
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the world
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 population divided by nations and their spending which included five categories.
Overall
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, the
leader
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leading
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 nation between people is Asia and
then
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Americans
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America
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 and Europe humans, these categories had the same numbers. For paying bills, people prefer to
payed
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pay
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 their salaries for basic needs and almost half of their budget to other personal categories. The most noticeable trend
that
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is that
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 more than half of humans are Asians, 57
percentages
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per cent
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. In the second place,
European
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Europeans
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 and Americans got 14 percentages for both of them. African people
achieve
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comprise
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 only 10% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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 population.
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, other humans population has
very
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a very
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 small minority. Regarding
to
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apply
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money spending, adults used the majority of their welfare for human's essential needs,
for example
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, for food, housing,
transports
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transport
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 and clothing, 60% respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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