The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the difference between the average weekly spending of families in one country in 1968 and in 2018.
Overall
, in both centuries families almost half of their income was spent
to
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"Food, housing and clothing" .
However
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it can be seen that "food" was a leader in
the
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consumption but it
fall
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fell
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dramatically
for
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18%
also
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and also
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lost 1st place in the diagram and
staying
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under "housing" and "leisure". As
it
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can be seen, "food" enormously
fall
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fell
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from just over a third of all weekly income to 17%
while
"housing"
rised
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rose
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to 19% from 10% which
show
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that they are almost doubled.
Additionally
, "clothing" which had
a similar percentages
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a similar percentage
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with
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"housing"
are
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was
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halved in 50 years.
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, we should pay
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proper attention to "leisure". It increased
for
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threefold to 21%. Other sections like
a
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"fuel and power",
"personal
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and "personal
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goods" decreased for a small minority and spending for "transport" doubled
while
"household goods" remained stable.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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