The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The following bar chart illustrates the percentage of five different
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groups of both genders who regularly exercised in Australia in 2010.
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women exercised more often in most of the
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groups provided in the chart. The number of
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in the 15-24
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higher. The
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accounted for more than half of all the people who exercise daily in the
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of 14 to 24,
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the 25 to 34
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accounted for 42.2% and 48.8% for
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and women, respectively. The proportion of
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was lowest in the 35-44
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at 39.5%.
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, for females, their proportions remain significantly higher than
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in groups of 35-44,45-54, and 55-64 at 52.5%, 53.3% and 53% respectively. Looking at our
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(65 and over), it is interesting to note that
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of
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almost equals the number of females in total. but, here
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women lead the margin with a slight proportion at 47.1%; the figure for
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remained at 46.7%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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