The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian
men
and women across age
groups who engaged in the exercise in 2010.
Overall
, a marked trend toward higher
percentage can be seen almost in Correct article usage
a higher
women
groups, Correct determiner usage
all women
although
variation
in level and rate are evident.
Women’s Fix the agreement mistake
variations
group
by age
45 to 54 recorded the largest participant
reaching 53.3 percent. The second largest dominance of the female Fix the agreement mistake
number of participants
group
is shown by the 55 to 64 age
group
(53%) followed by the 35 to 44 age
group
(52.5%). On the other side, number
of Correct article usage
the number
men
that
Correct word choice
who
doing
regular exercise Wrong verb form
do
are
dominated by the Change the verb form
is
age
of 15 to 24 with a participation rate reaching 52.8 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
This
is the largest number of men
in
doing physical exercise. Change preposition
apply
Men
’s group
by
Change preposition
aged
age
65 and over demonstrated the second largest male group
in doing regular physical activity. The lowest participation rate of this
two groups Correct determiner usage
these
were
47.1 % for women aged a
65 and over and 39.5 % for Correct subject-verb agreement
was
men
aged 35 to 44.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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