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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

#year #languages #people #life #world
Language
 was created by humans to communicate with others in the same area, so there are various languages around the world to be used in different overseas.
People
take
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benefit from communication in several ways: marketing, socializing, or education. In my personal opinion, I agree that our life will
easier
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 if we have less
language
.
Language
 is not just for communication but it
also
 keeps many history and stories of the country. It presents
diversity
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a diversity
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 of the culture and
life style
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 of
people
 who live in the area that
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there
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language
. As
the
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 result, the lack of
variety
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language
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languages
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 leads to the decline of
diversity
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culture
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, making ordinary society.
On the other hand
, the decrease of
language
 makes more
people
 use the same
language
 and makes them
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communicate easier.
This
 leads to more effective communication that makes
people
 achieve their goals.
Moreover
, the problem of misunderstanding can be solved by using the same
language
.
Consequently
,
disappearance
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 of minor languages can be one of the causes for improving our society.
To conclude
 everything that
have
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 been started, I agree that less
language
 makes our lives more efficient because it impacts our ability to communicate with others, leading to more understanding and more
successful
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to achieve
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 the same point.
Therefore
, our life’s quality will be improved and our society will be more peaceful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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