The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 3

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 3
The bar chart provided reveals the exports’ worth of a significant government in different classifications. The given table demonstrates the change in percentage in each
exports’
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exports
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classification in 2016 contrasted with 2015.
Overall
, the value of exports in each
categories
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category
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except “Gems and jewellery” increased in one year. The amount of export
earnings
from”Petroleum
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from the”Petroleum
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products” category is higher than
another
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other
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categories’
earnings
,
moreover
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moreover,
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the amount of
earnings
from exported textiles is the smallest. First of all, the government earned
60billion
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60 billion
dollars
in 2015 and about
65billions
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65 billion
in 2016.
Moreover
,
a
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the
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country obtained 55.000 million US
dollars
in 2015 and 5
billions
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billion
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more in 2016.
However
, only acquirement from exported gems and jewellery has
difference
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a difference
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.
A
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The
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government received
45billions
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45 billion
in 2015 and
40billions
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40 billion
in 2016.
Earning
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Earnings
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from agricultural products composed
30billions
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30 billion dollars
in 2015 and approximately
32billion
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32 billion
dollars
in 2016 meanwhile, they received
25billions
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25 billion dollars
in 2015 and about
30billion
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30 billion
dollars
in 2016. In the
next,
earnings
from products made from petroleum increased to 3%. Acquirement from engineering tools increased to 8,5% meanwhile, assets from gems decreased to 5,18%.
Earning
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Earnings
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from agricultural products grew only to 0,81% and
earnings
from textiles
raised
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rose
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to 15,24%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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