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The plans below show a traditional and modern two-storey Japanese house. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The diagrams compare the interior design of a traditional and modern Japanese
house
.
Overall
, the two
houses
 both consist of 2 floors with tatami flooring, sliding doors, and futons that can be used as cupboards
at
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during the daytime and unfolded as mattresses for sleeping purposes at night. Looking at the downstairs sections the the
houses
, upon entering the main and only entrances of the
houses
, we will get to the hall sections which are connected with different areas of the floor. The two
houses
 both have a
tradition
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 room with tatami flooring and a space to store the futons that can
also
 used as a cupboard. The traditional
house
 contains a separate kitchen and a big bathroom
while
 in the modern
house
, the kitchen and living/dining area are combined into a fluid space in order to maximize daily household activities. Moving on to the upstairs part, the traditional
house
 includes 2 traditional bedrooms with flooring and no bathroom. The modern
house
 has no traditional bedroom, but
instead
, comprises 3 modern bedrooms and 2 bathrooms with one located inside the primary bedroom.
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Your essay would benefit from a clearer introduction and summary to better frame and conclude your comparison. This can help provide greater structure and coherence.
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You should aim for more precise comparisons and use more complex sentence structures to enhance clarity and comprehensiveness of ideas.
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Including more specific examples when describing features and differences of the houses will make your arguments stronger and more compelling.
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You have effectively described and compared the main features of both types of houses with good detail.
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Your logical structure is clear, and the essay flows well from one point to the next.
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Main points are well-supported and articulated, providing a solid comparison of traditional and modern Japanese houses.

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