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WThe line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WThe line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates alterations in the amount of
coffee
 beans exported from
Brazil
, Colombia and Costa Rica from 2002 to 2012.
Overall
,  the main trend is that all countries increased
level
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the level
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 of
coffee
exports
 after all fluctuations,
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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. The leading position reached
Brazil
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Brazil's
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coffee
exports
. The most noticeable thing is that Costa
Rica
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Rica's
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 export amount started from 15kg in 2002.
Then
, it
was
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apply
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rapid
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rapidly
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deacrese
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decreased
 in 2006 but
after
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apply
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it
was
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apply
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gradual go
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gradually went
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 up between 2006-
2012
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and 2012
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.
Brazil
also
 started nearly 15kg as Costa Rica in 2002, but
Brazil
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Brazil's
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export
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exports
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 uplifted to approximately 25 kilograms and it got the biggest
coffee
 beans
exports
 . Regarding
to
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apply
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Columbia
coffee
exports
,
it
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they
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 began from 5 kilograms,
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and rise
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rise
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rose
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to more than 10
kg
 in 2006.
However
, from 2006 to 2008, it reached the lowest point among all countries and it got less than 5 kilograms. After
it
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that
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,
level
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the level
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 began to rise again and it achieved 15
kg
 per year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, exports, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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