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Youth unemployment is increasing in many countries in the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?

#youth #unemployment #countries #world #measures
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After we finished our high school graduation, everyone looking to join
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rich. It is crucial to recognize
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rapid development. One must consider
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 significance of social media to promote his home project to get a large income, which in itself will eliminate unemployment. I am of the firm conviction that the government should have a responsibility to employ citizens with university degrees, priority is given to married
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 with children,
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 to those with limited income and those suffering from weak financial income. It is imperative to address unemployment and should our government be more flexible
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Providing job opportunities for young
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 in various governmental, private and public sectors.
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You have addressed the topic of youth unemployment and provided potential solutions.
coherence cohesion
Your essay acknowledges the role of government and social media in addressing unemployment.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Educational mismatch
  • 2. Labor market
  • 3. Economic downturn
  • 4. Recessions
  • 5. Automation
  • 6. Technological innovation
  • 7. Displace traditional jobs
  • 8. Catch-22 situation
  • 9. Outsourcing
  • 10. Labor market policies
  • 11. Minimum wages
  • 12. Job protection laws
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