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he charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008.[181]

he charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008.[181]
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The table illustrates the average amount of
time
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 devoted to leisure activities namely TV, radio, video, books, and sport exercises daily by British
men
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 and
women
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 in 2008. The bar chart demonstrates how much
time
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was
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 spent on doing housework
such
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 as cooking and washing, shopping, repair, and clothing washing and ironing in the same surveyed period. Units in both charts are measured in
minutes
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 per
day
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.
Overall
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, TV, radio, and video were the most
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-consuming activities for both genders.
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, UK
men
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 tended to spend more
time
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 on pastimes, with the exception of books, than
women
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,
while
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 the opposite is true for housework activities, excluding repair work. Looking at the table, 137
minutes
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was
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were
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 spent daily on TV, radio, and video by UK
men
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, exceeding that of the opposite sex by 19
minutes
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.
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, British
men
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 used 18
minutes
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 every
day
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 to do sports exercises, compared to 11
minutes
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of
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for
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women
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. The same year;
however
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, witnessed nearly identical rates between UK males( 18
minutes
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 per
day
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) and females( 19
minutes
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 per
day
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) in the books category. Turning to the bar chart, there was a stark difference between the
time
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 proportions in cooking and washing, with
women
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 doing them for around 76
minutes
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everyday
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 as opposed to males’ approximately 38
minutes
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. The same trend is displayed in the case of clothing, washing, and ironing, which shows females’ rate ( 30
minutes
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 per
day
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) being three times that of males( 10
minutes
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 per
day
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). In terms of
time
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 spent on shopping,
this
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 for British females( nearly 38
minutes
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) still exceeded that for males( above 24
minutes
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).
Conversely
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, in 2008, the daily
time
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 devoted to repair was about 20
minutes
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 for
men
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 and less than 5
minutes
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 for
women
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, minutes, day with synonyms.
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