The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4
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The given chart demonstrates
country’s
Correct article usage
the country’s
export
Use synonyms
value
in different categories between 2015 and 2016 in percents.
Use synonyms
Overall
, the Linking Words
export
earnings have 5 various product categories, which are petroleum Use synonyms
products
, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural Use synonyms
products
and textiles.
It is seen that over a year the change in Use synonyms
value
of gems and jewellery class decreased, Use synonyms
while
others increased.
Linking Words
Firstly
, there is a 3% increase in earnings of petroleum Linking Words
products
Use synonyms
export
, making it the most profitable category with over Use synonyms
than
60 Change preposition
apply
billion
Use synonyms
dollars
in both years. Use synonyms
Then
by the amount of money comes the engineered goods that gained Linking Words
8,5
% increase. Correct article usage
an 8,5
As a result
in Linking Words
2016
the Add a comma
2016,
value
rate Use synonyms
is
70 Wrong verb form
was
billion
Use synonyms
dollars
.
The Use synonyms
export
categories of gems and Use synonyms
jewelry
were distinguished on a smaller scale, Change the spelling
jewellery
cause
it’s the only one that had a 5,18% decrease Correct word choice
because
comparing
with Change the form of the verb
compared
a
previous year. The increase of agricultural Correct article usage
the
products
Use synonyms
value
can be considered as negligible because it’s less than 1% (0,81), so the earnings stayed at the worth of 40 Use synonyms
billion
Use synonyms
dollars
. The same monetary Use synonyms
value
is typical for textiles in 2016. Use synonyms
Year
before that, the worth was slightly more than 30 Add an article
The year
A year
billion
Use synonyms
dollars
, but Use synonyms
this
category is equal to the Linking Words
last
one Linking Words
cause
it has the biggest percentage change in Correct word choice
because
value
(15,24%).Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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