The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 4
The given chart demonstrates
country’s
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the country’s
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export
value
in different categories between 2015 and 2016 in percents.
Overall
, the
export
earnings have 5 various product categories, which are petroleum
products
, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
and textiles. It is seen that over a year the change in
value
of gems and jewellery class decreased,
while
others increased.
Firstly
, there is a 3% increase in earnings of petroleum
products
export
, making it the most profitable category with over
than
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apply
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60
billion
dollars
in both years.
Then
by the amount of money comes the engineered goods that gained
8,5
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an 8,5
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% increase.
As a result
in
2016
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2016,
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the
value
rate
is
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was
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70
billion
dollars
. The
export
categories of gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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were distinguished on a smaller scale,
cause
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because
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it’s the only one that had a 5,18% decrease
comparing
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compared
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with
a
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the
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previous year. The increase of agricultural
products
value
can be considered as negligible because it’s less than 1% (0,81), so the earnings stayed at the worth of 40
billion
dollars
. The same monetary
value
is typical for textiles in 2016.
Year
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The year
A year
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before that, the worth was slightly more than 30
billion
dollars
, but
this
category is equal to the
last
one
cause
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because
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it has the biggest percentage change in 
value
 (15,24%).
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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