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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
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 chart demonstrates the
percentage
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 of
workers
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 in 1980 and 2010 among three sectors across four
countries
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.it is clear from the charts that
industry
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workers
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 had the highest
percentage
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 almost in all four
countries
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 in 1980 and 2010.
According to
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 what is shown in 1980 the
percentage
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 of
workers
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 in all the three sectors is almost the same in the four
countries
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.
however
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, China has a different
percentage
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 distribution agriculture presenting 70% of
workers
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.
On the other hand
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, Germany has almost 5 % of agricultural
workers
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.
Furthermore
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, in 2010 there was an increase in
industry
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workers
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 in Germany, the USA, and Japan.
Although
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 China had a decrease in all the three sectors. and Germany still has the highest number of
industry
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workers
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that
industry
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 worker is the future and will continue to increase. agriculture describes the practice of growing crops or raising animals.
In other words
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, not all these
countries
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 have an agricultural environment.
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