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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the total percentage of
workers
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 in
three
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 sectors across
four
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countries
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 during the period 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, the bar chart shows the total percentage of
workers
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 in
three
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 sectors during the period 1980 and 2010 across
four
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countries
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. The
three
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 sectors are
Agriculture
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, Industry and Services and the
four
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countries
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 are Germany, the USA, Japan and
China
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. During, the 1980s the
agriculture
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sector
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 has less than 10 per
cent
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 in the
three
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countries
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 Germany, the USA and Japan, but
China
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 has more than 60 per
cent
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 in the
agriculture
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sector
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. In the Industry
sector
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, all
four
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countries
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 maintain above 40 per
cent
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 and Germany has the lead of 60 per
cent
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 and in the final Service
sector
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 has more than 45 per
cent
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 in the other
three
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countries
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 except Japan has less than 45 per
cent
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 and the exact percentage of
workers
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 is 39. During 2010, the number of
workers
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 in
agriculture
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 gradually reduced in the other
three
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countries
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 by less than 5 to 10 per
cent
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 and
China
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 still maintains 50 per
cent
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 in
this
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sector
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. In the industrial
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sector
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sector,
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China
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 have 40 per
cent
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 only but the other
three
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countries
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 maintain above 60 to 85 per
cent
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 gradually. In the service
sector
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, all
four
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countries
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 maintain below 40 to 20 per
cent
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 of
workers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, three, four, countries, agriculture, china, sector, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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