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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates an
on going
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ongoing
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propose
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proposal
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 for a new
city
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.
Overall
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, in the new town, there are several
building
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buildings
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 that will be built in
a
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apply
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new
city
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,
such
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 as housing, lanes, ring roads,
factory
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a factory
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,
parking
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a parking
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area
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,
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bus
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a bus
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 terminal, and
recreational
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a recreational
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area
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.
According to
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 the picture, there is a ring road in the central
city
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, where around the ring roads are full of housing.
In
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On
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 the western side, there are 9 housing, with one factory located in the
northen
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northern
 of the
city
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.
Furthermore
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, in the middle of the housing, there is a road that can lead to
parking
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the parking
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area
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 and
also
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 to
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bus
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the bus
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 terminal.
Bus
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 terminal and parking
area
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located
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are located
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 across each other in the
central
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centre
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 of the
city
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.
Additionally
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, there are around 4 recreation
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area
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areas
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, it is located behind the parking lot near the housing. Meanwhile, there are 6 housing in the eastern of
new
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the new
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 town. In the eastern
area
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, the industry is placed opposite of the industry in
northern
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the northern
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area
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, where it
located
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is located
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 just south of the road and opposite of the housing.
Next,
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there is only one recreation
that is
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 located in the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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area
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.
Then
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, the northern
area
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 is full
with
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of
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 housing, with
total
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a total
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6
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of 6
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new housing.
Finally
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, the parking
area
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 and the
bus
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 stand
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also
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are also
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 available
in
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on
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 the left side of
recreation
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the recreation
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 and housing
area
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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