The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over berween 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the number of elderly people aged 65 and over in

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USA

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Sweden

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and

Japan

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between 1940 and 2040.

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, the diagram shows a substantial increase in the elderly population across all three countries throughout the period.

Initially

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USA

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the USA

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had the highest

number of

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population in

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proportion, with 9%, followed by

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sweden

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Sweden

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just

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over 5%. The lowest proportion was seen in

Japan

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at approximately 5%. The

USA

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and

Sweden

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began slightly increasing the following year , but

Japan

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began gradually decreasing. The

USA

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reached a peak in 1980, contributing to around 15% of the population proportion next was

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just under 15% during the same period of time.

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began plateauing throughout the period from 1960 till the end of the

1980's

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1980s

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, it began increasing in the succeeding years, reaching well above 25% at the beginning of 2040.

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Sweden

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and

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continued to rise marginally in the following years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, sweden, japan with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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157 words

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