The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over berween 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over berween 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of elderly people aged 65 and over in
USA
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the USA
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,
Sweden
and
Japan
between 1940 and 2040.
Overall
, the diagram shows a substantial increase in the elderly population across all three countries throughout the period.
Initially
,
USA
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the USA
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had the highest
number of
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population in
this
proportion, with 9%, followed by
sweden
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Sweden
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just
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over 5%. The lowest proportion was seen in
Japan
at approximately 5%. The
USA
and
Sweden
began slightly increasing the following year , but
Japan
began gradually decreasing. The
USA
reached a peak in 1980, contributing to around 15% of the population proportion next was
Sweden
just under 15% during the same period of time.
In contrast
,
Japan
began plateauing throughout the period from 1960 till the end of the
1980's
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1980s
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.
However
, it began increasing in the succeeding years, reaching well above 25% at the beginning of 2040.
Additionally
,
Sweden
and
Japan
continued to rise marginally in the following years.
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