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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture illustrates the
city
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 planners of Brandfield that has decided
city
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 planners to develop a new shopping mall for the area,
have
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and have
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been
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proposed S1 and S2,
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other
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the other
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 2 sites.
According to
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 the diagram, there are several sections in the Brandfield areas, where
golf
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the golf
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center
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centre
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in
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is in
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 the east area, and the
city
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center
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centre
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 is located in the central. Afterwards, the railway will be built from
southeast
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the southeast
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 build through
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the northewest
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northewest
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northwest
north-west
.
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 the river, the road will go
through
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from
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 northeast to central
then
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 through southeast.
On the other hand
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, there will be housing estate and industrial estate as well. The housing estate will be located in the north area, near the road, railway, and river.
Wheareas
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Whereas
, the industrial estates
is
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 constructed smaller than the housing
one
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ones
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, and located opposite the housing in the
eastsouth
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east south
east-south
 of the
city
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also
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 crossing by railway and lane.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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