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The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows information about the proportions of
boys
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 and
girls
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 in a school who achieved high grades in their respective courses.
Overall
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, as we can see obviously
girls
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 are outperformed in most areas. Especially, it is noticeable that there are significant differences in Chemistry and Computer Science.
However
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,
boys
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 had a great achievement in Geography. A similar percentage is in three subjects:
girls
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 had 36.7% and
Boys
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 had 34.6% in Physics. There are 47.4% for
girls
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 and 46.8% for
boys
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 in Foreign Languages, 49.2% for
girls
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 and 48.4% for
boys
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 in Mathematics.
In contrast
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, there was 30.2% for
girls
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 and 14.1% for
boys
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 in Chemistry. There was 56.3% for
girls
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 and 42.1% for
boys
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. And there was 20.1% for
girls
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 and 30.4% for
boys
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. There is a big gap of 10% in Chemistry and Computer Science between the girl group and the boy group
whereas
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, in Geography
boys
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 were better than
girls
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. It seems that the
boys
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 are good at geographical knowledge.

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