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The line graph shows the number of tourists who visited oman between 2000 to 2007

The line graph shows the number of tourists who visited oman between 2000 to 2007
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The provided line chart illustrates the number of
tourists
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 from Europe and Asia , who visited Oman from 2000 to 2007.
Overall
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,by having a cursory glance
on line
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 chart.It can be clearly seen that
the
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European
visitors
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 showed
increased
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an increased
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 trend.
However
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, the
visitors
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 from Asia showed
decreased
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a decreased
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 trend. To commence,in 2000, the number of
tourists
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 from
European
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Europe
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 and
Asian
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Asia
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 accounted for nearly 200 and 400 respectively.
European’s
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European
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tourists
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has
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experienced
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a steeply
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steeply
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incresed
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increase
 from 2000 until 2002 about 600
visitors
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.
Then
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,from 2002 to 2003 the figure
of
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for
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tourists
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 witnessed
slowely
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slowly
decreased
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decrease
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nearly
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by nearly
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 500.
However
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,
visitors
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 from Europe had a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 until 2007
approximately
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with approximately
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 800
tourists
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. Turning to the Asian
visitors
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, there was a gradual went up until 2003 about 490 .After that , from 2004 to 2006 , Asian
visitors
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 experienced a gradual fluctuation until
it
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they
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 reached the bottom
about
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of about
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 300.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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