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The line graph shows the number of tourists who visited oman from 2000 to 2007.

The line graph shows the number of tourists who visited oman from 2000 to 2007.
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The provided line chart illustrates the number of tourists from Europe and Asia , who
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came
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 to visit Oman from 2000 to 2007.
Overall
,by having a cursory glance on the line chart.It can be clearly seen that European
visitors
 showed an increased trend.
However
, the
visitors
 from Asia showed a decreased trend. To commence,in 2000, the number of tourists from
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Europe
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 and Asia accounted for nearly 200 and 400 respectively.European
outsider
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 experienced
steep
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increse
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increase
 from 2000 until 2002 about 600 foreigners.
Then
,from 2002 to 2003 the figure of sightseer witnessed slowly
decreas
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decrease
decreased
 by nearly 500.
However
,
visitors
 from Europe had a dramatic rise until 2007
approximately
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 800 tourists. Turning to the Asian
visitors
, there was a gradual went up until 2003 about 490 .After that , from 2004 to 2006 , Asian
visitors
 experienced a gradual fluctuation until it reached the bottom of about 300 travelers
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oman
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Oman
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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