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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how many male and female students studied
sciences
, mathematics, social
sciences
, languages, humanities, the arts, literature, and law in 2005, with the data measured in thousands.
Overall
, it is evident that the most favourite subject for men was
sciences
,
while
 social
sciences
 were for women. In terms of the subjects that were chosen by the boys, languages and the arts had the fewest voters with 3 and 4
people
 choosing them, respectively.
This
 number was followed by law accounting for 11 males and the remaining subjects
such
 as humanities, mathematics, literature, and social
sciences
 around 12 to 18.
However
, there were 23 men committed to study in
sciences
. Regarding the girls, they admit that Social
Sciences
 was the most attractive course with 24
people
 picked. Languages
also
 became popular for females because 17
people
 chose that subject.
Moreover
, both humanities and literature shared the same result with 13
people
, respectively.
Finally
, the other subjects only contributed 4 to 11 for women.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sciences, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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