The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of money
spending
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on home-cooked
meal
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meals
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and outside foods from 1970 to 2000. The unit given is percentages. The line graph displays data on people
preferred
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who preferred
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eating
juck
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junk
food or
dine
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in
restaurant
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a restaurant
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based on the same period.
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, a
decrease
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demand for home cooking seemed to correspond to a higher demand for fast foods and eating out over the recorded period. Looking at the pie chart, in 1970, households enjoyed cooking rather than spending on establishment
meals
, 90% and 10%, respectively.
However
, people started to go out
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to restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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to eat
since
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in
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1980
then
by 2000, half of the population spent their budget on
restaurant
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restaurants
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while
other
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the other
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half on home-cooked
meals
. Regarding
line
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graph, both showed
a
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upward trend and
have
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a
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same digit in the initial year, 20
meals
each. In the following year, more people
dine
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in compared to
order
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ordering
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out fast
foods
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food
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with 35 and 28
meals
, respectively in 1980.
However
, sitdown
restaurant
meals
experienced a soar and
reaching to
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a peak point at 85
meals
in
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the year's end. As for take out
order
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orders
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had a steady rise, at which point reached
to
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apply
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50
meals
in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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