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The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables below
illustrates
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 the quantities and increasing percentages of
foreigner
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 learners in the years 2002 and 2003 in Canada and America respectively. Generally, there were obviously more international students in the
USA
 and most of them were Indian, compared
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 dominant Chinese people in Canadian schools. In Canada, the number of foreigners at universities was 6978 in 2002 and China accounted for the highest number at 3100, followed by
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 and India with
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figures of 2243 and 1635 respectively. When it comes to 2003, there were 8517 students and almost half of them were Chinese, which increased evidently by 27%, followed by India with
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 significant upward of 50%(2460). Meanwhile, America saw a decrease of 6% with only 2101 students in Canada. As for
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, 23525 and 26989 persons came there to receive education in 2002 and 2003 respectively.
In addition
, Indian people witnessed
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 huge increase of 29%, from 11023 in 2002 to 14230 in 2003, which
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 around double times the figures
of
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 Chinese, which increased by 33%.
Additionally
, only Canadian learners became fewer in
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, with
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 quantity of 6852 in 2002 and
then
 it went down
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 the proportion of 23%,
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reached
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 5214 in 2003.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international students
  • percentage increase
  • student population
  • academic year
  • economic impact
  • cultural diversity
  • educational institutions
  • host country
  • enrollment rates
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • trend analysis
  • migration patterns
  • tuition fees
  • scholarship programs
  • visa policies
  • higher education
  • cross-border education
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