You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •give details of your study plans •explain why you want to get a part- time job •suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

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Dear Susan, I hope you are doing well. I'm writing to ask you

help

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me to find a part-time job. As you know, I'm going to study in another country where you live. Honestly, I'm interested in English.

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, I would like to study at

the

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university where located in

foreign

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a foreign

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country. To assist in covering the cost of my study, I decide to find

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part-time job. Not only to pay the cost of college, but

also

I know that the rental apartment in the city will not be cheap and

besides

that, I need the money

for purchasing

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to purchase

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food. So

that

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, I would like to arrange some temporary employment before I arrive. I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends or familiars to see if anyone wants a nanny for their children or

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a house-cleaner

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house-cleaner

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house cleaner

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. I think you know a lot of people and jobs there. I will be grateful if you help me to find

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job. I look forward to seeing you soon. Best wishes. Lucy.

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task achievement

Try to elaborate more on your study plans to give a complete picture of your intentions. This will help in achieving a more complete response.

coherence cohesion

Work on sentence structure and grammar accuracy to improve logical flow. For example, 'To assist in covering the cost of my study' could be more fluidly stated as 'To help cover my study costs'

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The tone of the letter is very suitable for a request of this nature. It is polite and friendly.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and help to establish a warm connection with the reader.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

172 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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