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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given tables illustrate the data about the consumption and manufacture of
potatoes
 in five
continences
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continents
South & Central
America
, Africa, North
America
, Europe and Asia in 2006.
Overall
,
while
 some parts had
the
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a
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 large
production
 of
potatoes
, many
contiences
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countries
 consumed more
potatoes
. Europe and Asia are the
most
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places where
produced
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preparation from
potatoes
, in turn ( lần lượt ) 126.3 and 131.2
million
tones
.
In contrast
, the number of
cosuming
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consumption
 in Europe,
which
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was lower than that
production
 with 96.1
kg
 per
person
. Asia was a bigger
diffirence
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difference
, they only consumed 25,8
kg
potatoes
 per
person
. Africa
with
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a similar data but not much
diffirence
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difference
, 14.1
kg
 per
person
 of consumption and 16.4
million
tones
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tonnes
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production
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of production
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. The only two
continences
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continents
 where people consumed
production
 from
potatoes
 than constructed were North
America
 and South & Central
America
. In North
America
, only 24.7
million
tones
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tonnes
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 of
production
 compared to 57.9k per
person
 consume
potatoes
.
While
 a
person
 from South & Central
America
 consumed 23.6kg
potatoes
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of potatoes
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, their parts just manufactured 15.6
million
tones
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tonnes
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 of
this
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, america, production, million, tones, kg, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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