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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years . The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast - food restaurants and sit - down restaurants per family .
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The two charts provide information about the budget proportion spent on eat-in
foods
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 compared to home-made
foods
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,related to the
number
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 of
meals
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 of both categories between the years 1970 and 2000.
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, it can be seen that the proportion of the dining budget moderately increased throughout the period
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 the pie chart.
In contrast
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, the home-cooked budget percentage gradually dropped during the timeframe. In terms of the total of
meals
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,the
number
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 suddenly rose from 1980 to 2000
while
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 the figure for dining
meals
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 slowly grew despite the same starting point of the two in 1970. Regarding the expense percentage of
meals
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 eaten at restaurants, it stood at just a tenth in 1970 and
then
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 showed a significant growth in the expenditure spent,which accounted for 15%,35%, and half in 1980,1990, and 2000 respectively.
Conversely
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, the percentage of expenditure spent on home-made
foods
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also
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 halved in 2000. In 1970, the
number
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 of
meals
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 eaten at the restaurants and taken
elsewhere
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 numbered 20
meals
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 a year. For the following decade, the figure for fast food
meals
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 soared from 30 by 1980 to approximately 90 by 2000
whereas
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 the
number
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 for home-cooked
foods
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 ended the period up at around 50.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words foods, number, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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