The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie graph illustrates
that
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the career of anthropology
graduates
after they complete their undergraduate degree courses, and the table shows
income
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the income
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of anthropology
graduates
from different types of employment. The majority of
graduates
are employed, and about half of
graduates
have full-time jobs.Compared to 20% who
doing
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part time
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jobs, 13% of
graduates
go on to graduate school, some of them
also
working part-time. Most of the remaining 20% of
graduates
are unemployed, and some do not know what to do. In the table,after working for 5 years,the majority of
graduates
who worked for the freelance consultants and government sector can earn more than $75000,
while
only a fifth of
graduates
in
this
type of employment can earn $25000-$75000.
In contrast
, 55% of
graduates
working in
the
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private companies earn a minimum wage of $75,000 or more,
while
about 35% of private companies employees earn between $50,000 and $75,000. All in all, most
graduates
find jobs and earn higher
salary
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salaries
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in
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as
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freelance consultants and government sector than in
the
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private companies.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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