Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?
As our world is becoming increasingly globalised, individuals are now more willing and able to find employment far away from their birthplace.
Although
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this
trend has certain drawbacks, I believe that the advantages are far more significant.
On the one hand, the mobility of labour for work is obviously clear. One of them is the separation of families and friends. People who work far away cannot visit their families often and they do not see their childhood friends as well. Linking Words
As a result
, they tend to feel empty and lonelier which may impact their performance at the office. Linking Words
Furthermore
, if workers do not return back home, local companies may struggle to find employees to grow their businesses. Linking Words
For instance
, most of South Asia Countries have a large scale of the adult population who works abroad. Linking Words
This
situation could lead to a lack of local employees that impacts the progression of local businesses.
Today, for many people, looking for a job beyond their hometown has some positive measures. First of all, they provide higher salaries and better employment opportunities. In most big cities, Linking Words
for example
, there are many job vacancies in different industries and Linking Words
thus
, many companies facilitate career advancement in various ways. Linking Words
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as well as
accumulate savings and learn new skills, establishing businesses in their hometown which can contribute to economic growth.
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it is clear that
looking for employment within national borders or abroad may happen for some specific reasons. Linking Words
Although
there are some possible downsides of working away, I believe that the potential benefits outweigh its disadvantages.Linking Words
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...