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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows three sites in which a supermarket is to be built in the
city
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 of Ellington which has a population of 120,000.
Site
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 A, which is located in the residential
area
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 of the town is near to the
city
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 of Hampford which has a population of 30,000. It is
also
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 very close to the park and the
traffic free
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traffic-free
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 zone
while
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also
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 being next to the railway which goes through the industrial
area
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 of the
city
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 making it an ideal
site
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 for the construction of a supermarket.
Whereas
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,
Site
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 B, which is in the countryside is east of the motorway and is far away from the
area
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 where people reside, making it inaccessible to them. Meanwhile,
Site
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 C is
also
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 in the countryside
is
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and is
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 near to both the industrial and residential
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area
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areas
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 of the
city
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.
Site
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 C is
also
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 next to the railway and is near
to
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apply
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the airport which is
at
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on
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it's
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its
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 west.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, site, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population density
  • foot traffic
  • residential area
  • commercial area
  • outskirts
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • commuting
  • accessible
  • proposed sites
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