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The charts below show the percentage of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time education in 2006.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time education in 2006.
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The supplied bar graph gives information on two gender representatives- female and male students who prefer part-time or full-time
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 in 2006 in Australia.
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, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of part-time students whose ages comprised between 20 and 24 among both genders tip the scales, in comparison with full-time
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. With regards to part-time
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 among 20-24 aged young people, males comprised 40%,
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 females followed a similar pattern with 42%.
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, 25-29 aged individuals plateaued at 8%.
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, 30 years old males exhibited consistently higher percentages- 8%, compared with females- 6%.
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, the figures for those who prefer full-time jobs were smaller for the remaining categories. Adolescents from 15 to 19, comprised 12% and 17%, respectively. In the 20-24 age group both gender groups exhibited a similar tendency to choose full-time
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 in Australia.
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, adults who are 30 years old, comprised only 6% of women and slightly more than 8%
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