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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 2

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 2
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The given map demonstrates Branford
city
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. Planners of
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city
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the city
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concluded
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decided
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 to build a new shopping mall in the
city
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, and two areas, which are S1 and S2 were chosen. Overview, The main difference between
two
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the two
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 sites is that S1 is located near to town
center
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centre
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,
while
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 S2 is located near
to
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apply
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the Industrial Estate. The sites can
also
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 be compared in terms of access by road or rail Looking at the information in more detail, S1 is
more
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a more
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 convenient site to build
shopping
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a shopping
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 mall for two reasons.
Firstly
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, S1 is located nearly to the residential area and
city
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 centre.
This
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 site would be more comfortable for citizens to visit.
In addition
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, people may reach
this
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 area by car on the road or by train on the railway.
On the other hand
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, S2 looks emptier
in contrast
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 with S2 site.
That is
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 one of
reasons
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the reasons
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, why S2 is more appropriate
to build
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for building
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new
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 mall. Another reason is that S2 is closer to reach for people from other towns, which are located on the south side of Brandfield.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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