The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The previous line graph illustrates food categories consumed by
people
in
kg
per
person
in Australia from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in 1950 vegetables were
primarly
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primarily
consumed by Australians, followed
meat
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and
bread
.
In contrast
, seafood was eaten the least, followed by
bread
.
At the end
of the period (2010) ,
people
kept their preference for vegetables, being seafood and
bread
the
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least consumed. In detail,in 1950, the majority of
people
consumed vegetables (around 140
kg
per
person
) followed by meat (approximately 110%) and fruit (80%).
While
the consumption of these 3 products showed certain fluctuation in the next years, in 2010, the three categories continued being the
people
's
favorite
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option
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.
In contrast
, in 1950, seafood got the least popularity with only 20%
kg
consumed per
person
, followed by
bread
with 40%.
Although
the Australian population did not choose to consume a
big
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amount of
bread
at the beginning of the period, its popularity increased, especially in 1970 when it
got
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reached
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its highest peak of approximately 70
kg
per
person
.
However
, it declined to 60%
in
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at
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the beginning of the period (2010).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, kg, person, bread with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • dietary preferences
  • staple foods
  • health awareness
  • rising health concerns
  • shift towards healthier eating habits
  • intake
  • notable trend
  • significant feature
  • consumption
  • reflecting changing
  • availability
  • a decline towards
  • initially increased
  • steady rise
  • marked decrease
  • period of stability
  • dramatically
  • a sharp rise
  • gradual change
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