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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph compared the number of people
live
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living
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 in
cities
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 in
four
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 distinct
countries
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 during
30-year
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a 30-year
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 period and a prediction
in
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for
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 the next decade.
Overall
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,the
four
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countries
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 saw a
paralled
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parallel
paralleled
 trend,the rate of people living in
cities
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 increased
at the end
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 of 2020
,
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apply
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and predicted persistently grow in the next 20 years.
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,the percentage of city
citizents
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citizens
of Malaysia
rank
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ranks
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 highest among the
four
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countries
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. In 1970,the amount of city citizens in Malaysia and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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is
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was
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 approximately 30,ranking the highest among the
four
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countries
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.
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 the figure in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 faced ups and downs,the percentage of the population
live
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living
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 in
cities
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 in Malaysia is far higher than
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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,
peaked
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peaking
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 at 85% in 2040. The population
live
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living
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 in
cities
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 of Thailand steadily clined to 30% in 2000,
equdling
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equaling
 the amount for Indonesia,
thereafter
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,being overtaken by Indonesia in the subsequent 40 years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, four, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • trend
  • percentage
  • urban population
  • actual data
  • predictions
  • steady increase
  • striking difference
  • projection
  • fluctuation
  • contributing factors
  • demographic changes
  • socio-economic development
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