The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
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The bar chart illustrates the ratio of male and female students enrolled in various subjects at tertiary institutions in Australia in 1995.
Overall
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, Engineering was the most popular subject among
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it attracted the fewest
females
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.
In contrast
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, Arts and Humanities had the highest
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registration but ranked low among
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.
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, Health was highly
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by the ladies but was the least popular choice among
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. Other subjects showed more balanced
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between the genders. In terms of male
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, Engineering
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with nearly 20%, followed by Math and Science, which attracted around 15% of male students. Arts and Humanities,
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popular with
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, saw about 10% of male registration, placing
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third. Accounting
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Economics and Business Studies were chosen by around 7-10% of
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, Education and Health
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the least popular among
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, each attracting less than 5 percentage. For
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, the bat was quite different. Art and Humanities topped The chart with approximately 20% of the
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. Health was the second most popular, with around 15% of
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choosing the subject, followed closely by Education. Accounting & Economics and Business Studies were chosen by around 10% of female students, similar to men's.
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very few
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shoe Engineering making it the least popular subject among them, with
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figures below 5 per cent.
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