The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

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The bar chart illustrates the ratio of male and female students enrolled in various subjects at tertiary institutions in Australia in 1995.

Overall

, Engineering was the most popular subject among

males

while

it attracted the fewest

females

In contrast

, Arts and Humanities had the highest

woman

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registration but ranked low among

man's

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Additionally

, Health was highly

favored

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by the ladies but was the least popular choice among

males

. Other subjects showed more balanced

enrollment

between the genders. In terms of male

enrollment

, Engineering

lead

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with nearly 20%, followed by Math and Science, which attracted around 15% of male students. Arts and Humanities,

although

popular with

females

, saw about 10% of male registration, placing

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third. Accounting

and

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Economics and Business Studies were chosen by around 7-10% of

males

, Education and Health

where

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the least popular among

males

, each attracting less than 5 percentage. For

females

, the bat was quite different. Art and Humanities topped The chart with approximately 20% of the

ladies

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enrollment

. Health was the second most popular, with around 15% of

females

choosing the subject, followed closely by Education. Accounting & Economics and Business Studies were chosen by around 10% of female students, similar to men's.

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very few

females

chooses

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shoe Engineering making it the least popular subject among them, with

enrollment

figures below 5 per cent.

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The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary insititutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree er disagree with this statement?

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

You are working at home and have a problem with be shap equipment that you use for your job at a letter to the shop or company which applied the equipment in your letter describe the problem with equipment explain how this problem affecting you say what you want the shop or company to do